Pinepaw thunderclan

[PINEZY]

Name: Pinepaw
Gender: Female
Affiliate: thunderclan
Rank: Apprentice

Looks: A thin fluffy black and gray stripped tabby. With a long tail and small paws, thick bushy tail and head. Shiny wight long sharp teeth. Wight puffy chest.
Personality: She is a hard worker and loves to hunt. But she is known to hold a grudge for a long time. Pinepaw is vary loyal and never talks back ( accept for an occasional remark or two).
Birth: Clan born ...... Thunderclan

History: Pinepaw was born with a sister but she died after 2 moons. Pinepaw was vary sad and Alone for a long time, Intel she found out she was going to be an apprentice. Now she is always happy and joyful because she found meaning again.
RP Sample: Early one morning Pinepaw awoke to a rush of excitement. She remembers
that today is her first day of training. She was ready to find out who
her mentor was. so she started grooming herself so she would look her
best in front of her new mentor. Pinepaw looked around to noticed she
was one of the first ones up. Normally she would go back in and lie
down but she is to exited today to do anything but, wait.

[LEN KAGAMINE]

o.o

Yeah... >> Um... (Major Grammer, Sentence Formation, Punctuation, and Spelling freak.. >>)

SPELL CHECK!

He ish supposed to be Her in the History!

Hole? It's Whole... >>

Pews? That's for a Church.... It's Paws...

Whit is supposed to be White.

Vary is very...

Exiting should be exciting.

Punctuation Check! (With spelling and Sentence Formation Checks! xD)

"A thin fluffy black and gray stripped tabby. with a long tail and small pews. thick bushy tail and head. shiny whit, long sharp teeth"

A thin, fluffy, black and gray, stripped tabby. She (Or Pinepaw) has a long tail, and small paws.

"she is a hard worker and loves to hunt. but She is known to hold a grudge for a long time. pinepaw is vary loyal and never talks back ( accept for an occasional remark or two)."

She is a hard worker and loves to hunt, but she is known to hold a grudge for a long time. Pinepaw is very loyal and never talks back ( accept for an occasional remark or two).

"Pinepaw has lived in shadowclan all he life and has never done anything exiting before. she has been waiting he hole life to be a warrior. she always eats last."

Pinepaw has lived in Shadowclan all her life and has never done anything exciting before. She has been waiting her whole life to be a warrior. She always eats last.

"Early one morning Pinepaw awoke to a rush of excitement. She remembers that today is her first day of training. She was ready to find out who her mentor was. so she started grooming herself so she would look her best in front of her new mentor. Pinepaw looked around to noticed she was one of the first ones up. Normally she would go back in and lie down but she is to exited today to do anything but, wait."

Early one morning, Pinepaw awoke to a rush of excitement. She remembered that today is her first day of training. She was ready to find out who her mentor was, so she started grooming herself, so she would look her best in front of her new mentor. Pinepaw looked around to noticed she was one of the first ones up. Normally she would go back in and lay down but she is to exited today to do anything, but wait.

And, most of us will write in Past Tence...

[Noname]

... Wow... *backs away from the grammar/spelling/punctuation police*

[Amberstorm]

Holy crap, Kyu.

STOP SCARING THE NEW MEMBERS LIKE THAT! OMG! HOW MANY TIMES DO I HAVE TO GIVE THIS SPEECH OUT?
WE DON'T SCARE NEW MEMBERS BY OVERWHELMING THEM WITH STUFF LIKE GRAMMER! THAT'S FOR ME TO DO LATER! IT DRIVES THEM AWAY!

[PINEZY]

i fixed it please let me join

[LEN KAGAMINE]

o.o

I cant TC Approve Bios... >>

xD

[ϟ ɅȻԐ ϟ]

English Police wrote:
And, most of us will write in Pastence...

It's Past Tense, young nerdling. XP

[Riber~]

Good enough.
Accepted.

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