I need to be approved.
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I need to be approved.
by Sneezewhisker Fri Apr 30, 2010 6:48 pm
Name: Sneezewhisker, Shadowclan
Gender: Male/Tom
Age: 19
Affiliate: Clan cat
Rank: Warrior
Looks: Sleek, muscly grey-and-white tom. With piercing green eyes. Black paws. Muscles ripple when he walks.
Personality: Harsh and hostile sometimes. Not afraid to stand up for what he believes in. Doesn’t know when to back off. Not afraid to stand up for cats being bullied. If other cats are making accusations about him or his clan, he will not be afraid to fight for what's his.
Birth: His birth was harsh, because when he was born, and his mother abandoned him. She didn't like him becausae of the way he looked, so she left him lying in the snow. He soon caught green-cough, but luckily a Shadowclan cat came and took him in.
History: He had green-cough as a kit. Was abandoned by his own mother. And then was taken into Shadowclan. It taught him to be harsh and hostile to other Clans.
RP Sample: (It is not about Sneezewhisker, it's about other cat. Is it all right?)
Cherrydapple, Moonflight and Fangheart padded out of camp on patrol. They headed toward the east border, and scented the smell of a whole herd of badgers! And they were looking straight at the huddle of cats! Fangheart, Cherrydapple and Moonflight had to stay and fight, in order to protect their clan. It was a good thing they had the element of surprise. Moonflight launched herself at the nearest badger and sliced it across the muzzle. Cherrydapple flung herself onto the one behind Moonflight in a flurry of swiping claws. She brought it to the ground quickly and moved onto the next one. Fangheart, the best fighter of the group, had already taken down two, and there was only two left. Moonflight had lost most of her energy, and it turned out the two badgers weren't the dumbest of the pack, they were the smartest! So when she turned to attack one of them, it was ready for her and picked her up in its muzzle! She yowled and you could hear bones snapping. "Moonflight!" Fangheart yowled. He launched himself at the badger head-first, ramming his forehead into its stomach, careful not to hurt Moonflight. Cherrydapple, not wanting the second one to attack, tried to attack it all by herself, but didn't succeed. She got trampled as she found that this badger was clearly not slow to react. She fell to the floor in defeat, welcoming the silentness of uncnsciousness where she could delve into herself and not worry. Fangheart was still calm, knowing that he was the only one left to fight the two badgers. He knew he could do it. He called on all his strength from Starclan to take down the first one to rescue Moonflight. Then, without hesitation, he jumped onto the one that had hurt Cherrydapple. Die, you foul beast!
He thought as the second one crashed to the floor. He dragged Cherrydapple out of the way just in time. He had to get help, but he couldn't leave them here. He decided to stay with them, licking their pelts to warm them up. But they needed help, fast.
(Is it too long?)
Gender: Male/Tom
Age: 19
Affiliate: Clan cat
Rank: Warrior
Looks: Sleek, muscly grey-and-white tom. With piercing green eyes. Black paws. Muscles ripple when he walks.
Personality: Harsh and hostile sometimes. Not afraid to stand up for what he believes in. Doesn’t know when to back off. Not afraid to stand up for cats being bullied. If other cats are making accusations about him or his clan, he will not be afraid to fight for what's his.
Birth: His birth was harsh, because when he was born, and his mother abandoned him. She didn't like him becausae of the way he looked, so she left him lying in the snow. He soon caught green-cough, but luckily a Shadowclan cat came and took him in.
History: He had green-cough as a kit. Was abandoned by his own mother. And then was taken into Shadowclan. It taught him to be harsh and hostile to other Clans.
RP Sample: (It is not about Sneezewhisker, it's about other cat. Is it all right?)
Cherrydapple, Moonflight and Fangheart padded out of camp on patrol. They headed toward the east border, and scented the smell of a whole herd of badgers! And they were looking straight at the huddle of cats! Fangheart, Cherrydapple and Moonflight had to stay and fight, in order to protect their clan. It was a good thing they had the element of surprise. Moonflight launched herself at the nearest badger and sliced it across the muzzle. Cherrydapple flung herself onto the one behind Moonflight in a flurry of swiping claws. She brought it to the ground quickly and moved onto the next one. Fangheart, the best fighter of the group, had already taken down two, and there was only two left. Moonflight had lost most of her energy, and it turned out the two badgers weren't the dumbest of the pack, they were the smartest! So when she turned to attack one of them, it was ready for her and picked her up in its muzzle! She yowled and you could hear bones snapping. "Moonflight!" Fangheart yowled. He launched himself at the badger head-first, ramming his forehead into its stomach, careful not to hurt Moonflight. Cherrydapple, not wanting the second one to attack, tried to attack it all by herself, but didn't succeed. She got trampled as she found that this badger was clearly not slow to react. She fell to the floor in defeat, welcoming the silentness of uncnsciousness where she could delve into herself and not worry. Fangheart was still calm, knowing that he was the only one left to fight the two badgers. He knew he could do it. He called on all his strength from Starclan to take down the first one to rescue Moonflight. Then, without hesitation, he jumped onto the one that had hurt Cherrydapple. Die, you foul beast!
He thought as the second one crashed to the floor. He dragged Cherrydapple out of the way just in time. He had to get help, but he couldn't leave them here. He decided to stay with them, licking their pelts to warm them up. But they needed help, fast.
(Is it too long?)
Last edited by Sneezewhisker on Fri Apr 30, 2010 8:13 pm; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : Because it's not long enough.)
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Re: I need to be approved.
by Member Fri Apr 30, 2010 6:50 pm
The looks, personality, and history is too short.
And the RP sample is fine.
And the RP sample is fine.
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Re: I need to be approved.
by Member Fri Apr 30, 2010 7:16 pm
Everything is still too short. You have to break it into sentences. It's dumb but... eh.
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Re: I need to be approved.
by Sneezewhisker Fri Apr 30, 2010 7:29 pm
How long do they have to be? How many sentences?
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Re: I need to be approved.
by Sneezewhisker Sat May 01, 2010 7:20 pm
Thanks so much!!! I'm so happy! :smiledance:
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